The Official Writing Challenge
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02/21/09
Chilling and well-told.

A few typos, but nothing major. Also, you may have wanted to add in a couple of details, such as sounds or smells, to give the reader the sense that the story is really set in India.

I'm interested in the backstory of these characters. Let me know if you write more.