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Very moving. And I love the repeated use of 8:28. It is a verse I have held on to for several years.

A space between speakers might make this a bit easier to read.

Nicely done.
Okay, two words.

Goose. Bumps.

Wowzer, what a twist at the end, and the thread of the verse all the way through is brilliant.
Wow! Very clever -- the ending was such a twist. I had to go back and read the beginning again as I was convinced this was a wedding obviously. Very, very nice!
This is very well-written. I did not expect the twist at the end.

A couple of tiny things to note. Marathi is more commonly used than Maratha (which refers to a specific group of castes within India). Also, the 50 million people comment seemed to be just tossed in there. Not sure what you meant as it doesn't match the population of India, Mumbai, or the state of Maharashtra.

I really enjoyed reading this story. I can see this being expanded into a novel.
This is so touching. Your story brought tears to my eyes. I felt like a part of it beacause August 28 is my husband's birthday. I love your writing. God bless you.
A very tender story with an emotional twist. Well done.
Woo hoo!!!! Congratulations on 3rd place!!!! Soooooo happy for you!
Hi Adele. I just wanted to leave a quick note to congratulate you on your 3rd place win in Level 1, and to also let you know your entry made it into the Highest Rankings, placing 25th overall. That's excellent for a Level 1 entrant.

If you'd like to check the highest rankings for yourself, you can find them here:

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Congratulations again. With love, Deb (Challenge Coordinator)
Fantastic all the way through! I loved every word, and was captured by every thought!