The Official Writing Challenge
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This is a good picture of need, and what is really happening. Do though make sure that you put spaces inbetween so it is easier to read.
Wonderful descriptions! Great way you got into his head!
powerfully written.
But what comes afterwards? Did you sponsor him? Did you rally round a gang of friends to sponsor his entire village? You have plenty of words left before your limit, so don't let those creative juices dry up!
Wow! I could see his eyes and feel the HOPE!!

Charlene Reid
Great descriptions; I had him pictured in my head. But I was left with wanting to know what happenend, if he got some new shoes and a smile. I pray he did. thanks