The Official Writing Challenge
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01/15/09
Sounds like a very pleasant lunch!

I was looking for something more to happen--some conflict, or another plot development.

I'll bet your friend from Mexico wasn't prepared for the northern weather!
Nice little sketch and a good use of dialog to advance the story. I am a little confused about the change of person. Are "Ken" and "I" the same person? Or are there three people at the lunch?
It was a good use of dialog for the story, but I to wanted to hear more detail. I was reading and always hoping for a little more description of the setting. Thanks for sharing your experience!