The Official Writing Challenge
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11/17/08
A lot of similar stories but I really liked this one. Good job.
Great title! This story flows well and keeps the reader engaged. Good job.
11/19/08
Ahh, this brought tears to my eyes. It reminds me of the first Christmas my son and I had after my young husband died from cancer. It was so difficult to celebrate Christmas, but I had a three-year-old son...and well...we celebrated in the best way we could. Still...it's not easy to go on like that and I can attest to the fact that your descriptions are true-to-life. I like the hope at the end--that's just the way it happens when you know where your loved ones are spending their Christmas!
Two things struck me in the way you handled this subject: One is the timing of the letter's arrival - it shows just how much George knew and cared and loved his wife; and the other that he also loved and cared for his family as a whole in that the letters were also received by his children. Nice job presenting this!
I like how George was there for his wife and children, and how he encouraged them to celebrate the birth of our Savior. What a loving story. Nicely done!
Very tender story. You did a good job making me feel what your MC was feeling. Nicely done.
Comforting, tender story. I'd like to hear the son share something from his letter. To deal with word count, I'd eliminate explaining who Mary is, which isn't pertinent to the story, so there's room for the son to say more instead. The title is perfect!
11/19/08
You wrote very tenderly what I have seen friends deal with a year ago. Beautifully done.
Very thoughtful story and great job showing emotions. I enjoyed the smooth writing style.
11/20/08
This story "got me." Now I'm a wreck. Congratulations!