The Official Writing Challenge
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I really enjoyed this. You captured it perfectly and made a very interesting read. Good Job.
Well done! I thought of going with this idea too, but used another one. You did a great job with rhythm and rhyme. thank you for writing this.
A very enjoyable poem. Remember to keep the beat with every line. Adding too many words in one line can take it off beat.
This really gave me a new perspective on the age old story of the Fall. I enjoyed reading it very much!
I think you gave us a good sense of the emotions of Adam on that day. Nice job, and keep on writing.
Excellent and fun to read...

Keep up the good work.

May God bless.

Dan Blankenship