The Official Writing Challenge
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07/12/05
Very nice descriptions. (just a few techincal things that could use some work). A little proofreading (maybe ask a friend), and I read mine out loud.
07/13/05
You have descibed very clearly your experiences at the beach; your sense impressions make for very interesting reading.
07/14/05
Good imagery and descriptions, a proof reader will help you, but this is a good start.
07/15/05
I was starting to get a little sea sickness, with the coming and going, and rolling. Nothing bad intended. That's how vivid the descriptions were. Good descriptions for a beginner. Keep on keepin on. God bless ya, littlelight
The theme came through: movement! The images (and life in general?) is ever-changing.