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You've done well to capture the heartbeat of a household in this neat little piece! I enjoyed the read and the way you described how it wasn't the outside that counted, but the 'home' and the 'family'. Nice job! ^_^
I liked the description of the difference between a home and a house. You've done a good job of describing it. I would've liked to know more of your parents and those sisters you mentioned and less of the hardships. But well done keep it up.
06/08/08
Great allusion in the last paragraph!
06/08/08
My favorite part was the last paragraph... loved the pinnochia comparison.. Great job!
06/08/08
We had one of those houses where "the wind howled through the turn of the century window." :) Your Mom sounds like an amazing woman. I like the alliteration of you title (which is perfect for this story.) Nice work on this.
I appreciate you giving us a glimpse into your family life and the home in which you lived in. :)
I'm happy to find you and your easy-reading style. I related to your descriptions as the visuals are excellent. Welcome to FW.