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I love the tone of this! Sweet and playful with a little emotion mixed in. Enjoyable read. Thanks for sharing!
What precious memories to have! I really liked how you portrayed the daughter-the humor is there in that last few lines where she shouts "score!" That last line was my favorite though-well done! ^_^
I love the touch of humor here, with the "Score!" and the family lore.

A few things: the movie is "Cat Ballou", and the sentence ending " brother and I" should be " brother and me."

The dialogue is well-done in your story, and takes it up a notch in quality.
I enjoyed this warm story of memories and tradition, and loved the ending.
I wish I had known of these "slower" times. They sound wonderful. I really liked the tone of this piece, and how you mixed several different emotions into it.

There were a few small typos, but those are easily corrected, and they didn't detract from the story.

Great writing. I look forward to reading more of your stuff in the weeks to come.
What wonderful memories. This is sweet and touching, and the ending make me chuckle. Nicely done.
Your story touched my heart--memories of a slower time, indeed. Thank you for sharing.