The Official Writing Challenge
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You did a good job of highlighting how God can speak, and how often we can miss it entirely by not paying attention to the thoughts and dreams we have.
Very interesting and thought-provoking story.

I don't think you need the asterisks to indicate "scene changes". When the action is not greatly removed from the previous paragraph by time or space, just a transisitional phrase will do, and your story will flow better.

I love the way your main character was tuned in to God.
Very nice writing. It is so awesome to see how God speaks to us when we least expect it.
This reminds me of a recent invention of a ceramic filter that can provide huge quantities of clean water.

I agree that it would have been better to link the sections with a sentance or phrase in some way.

You put over the message about the important of vision and dreams very well. I learnt a lot about the way God communicates with us. Thanks.
Very creative idea. I would love to see this as a longer story where you could develop some of your ideas a little more. Great job.
What a vision you have, keep up the good words. This was intriguing and facinating.
I liked that your MC followed through with the idea that God gave to him.

Good job Marlene. I appreciate you sharing this.
Oh this is certainly very different! I mean that in a good way-very creative! I liked how the dream tied in completely with everything else, really good and especially with your MC, I wanted to know more about Joey and everything. Great job! ^_^
God moves in mysterious ways, His wonders to perform.

Good work Marlene, you've certainly captured the topic. When God gives a vision, go for it. Well done.
I liked how he didn't ignore his dream when he had a chance to use the idea. And I Agree with others that God can certainly work in mysterious ways. Keep writing. God Bless