The Official Writing Challenge
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06/08/05
Okay, you are on to something here - a little work on dialog structuring, and work on other minor issues and you are on the road to a good essay. Sometimes if our work is too long, all we need to do is tighten our phrases. Thank you.
06/09/05
I agree with Dub. You are on to something here, and with a little tightening and polishing, this will be of winner quality! Very good story. God Bless you. :0)
06/10/05
Looking foward to reading more :)
06/10/05
Interesting with a great concept. I agree that the dialogue needs a little work to make it flow more smoothly. Also, if you double space between paragraphs, it makes for an easier read. Keep writing!
Blessings, Lynda