The Official Writing Challenge
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Loved the first sentence. Good dialog here too, just a few typos, should be here not hear...Look at the third paragraph from the bottom, joined then going to join, needs to be more consistant. Keep it up.
This was a very engaging story. A couple of words you separated that really should be together: everything & sunset. Thank you for sharing! Keep up the great work.
You built good characters in this story. The ending was a bit abrupt. Izzy was close enough to Heather that she was called by a nickname and Izzy knew Heather's habits, like staying to do homework at the Library. A little more interaction between the two girls might have made the separation more believable. But, there's always that word count, isn't there?!? :)