The Official Writing Challenge
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You've got some lovely descriptive passages here, and I like the playful relationship between the husband and wife.

I caught a misspelling of "luau", and I think you may have been too literal in your interpretation of the proverb.

I also like that she did not give up in her pursuit of what she had seen.
I love your descriptions! I was wishing I was standing on that clifftop! Keep on writing. You have much potential!
Great descriptive detail in this piece. Good job. :)