The Official Writing Challenge
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02/01/08
Very nice writing! I loved this. Really liked your ending. Great job!
Laury
Well written - I loved it. I'm glad your MC was able to laugh at having only cookies in the cupboard. She's blessed too, to have such a good friend too.
02/02/08
Good job!

Think about introducing the character of Jane earlier in the story, as she just shows up at the end to provide resolution to the conflict.

An expensive lesson to learn!
02/05/08
Excellent use of the topic! Well-written and enjoyable. I agree with Jan, Jane needs to be introduced a little earlier. Keep writing!