The Official Writing Challenge
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While this type of story is not my particular favorite type-your telling held my attention. In my opionion that's good story-telling! It is a good illustration of the subject. Bless YOU!
Right on topic!
You do well, mixing dialogue with action.
The strange names sometimes slow me down, but that's part of your genre.
good job...keep writing
I liked the storytelling. It kept my attention. Also, your descriptions were very nice. I sometimes find it ahrd for me to describe battle sequences, but you did a great job.

I thought that some of the names of the characters seemed more fitting to a sci-fi story instead of a fantasy story, but that's just my opinion. Very good job!
Great story which kept to the topic.

I enjoy this particular genre, so it left me wanting more.
Well done.