The Official Writing Challenge
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01/21/08
On topic, for sure. A few small punctuation and grammar tweaks would polish it up just fine. I know what you meant, but "...had not eaten all day, except for one little boy," threw me for a second. :0) This would make a very nice devotional.
01/22/08
OH, I love this story!
I wish you had gone into more detail. It's such an example of this topic.
Good job...keep writing