The Official Writing Challenge
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Great last line, and super job with the mood of this story.

There are some problems with capitalization, particularly of dialog. Just a few minor edits needed, though--this is a good piece.
This is a great emotional piece. In good writing, grammatical errors are jarring - such as missing capital letters at the beginning of sentences. You have the skills to be in level 2 or even level 3, so be careful on the editing. Some of the scene transitions are abrupt, particularly the gravesite to school setting flashback.
Very good storytelling.
Great writing skills here. As mentioned, watch your capitalization & punctuation, and a large space, or a few dashes, between scene changes would make the reading smoother. This would be a really good story for teens. I'd say I enjoyed it, but it made me sad! :) So I'll just say it's very good. Love the ending.
So Sad!
Good use of dialogue. I got a little confused with the many names of friends.
Good job...keep writing.
Excellent job, this is a very moving story...