The Official Writing Challenge
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01/11/08
Right on! Good job--I could feel the nervous tension and even the silences over the phone. I really liked this! :)
01/11/08
This is nice, and would be great as a discussion-starter for a teen group.

I think the last paragraph is probably not necessary. Trust your own writing and your character development to teach the lesson, and you won't have to summarize it for the reader.

Authentic dialog gives this a very realistic feel.
01/11/08
Good dialogue! Right on topic.
The ending was a little over-explained. Ending with her decision to make things right would have been sufficient.
Good writing.
Keep it up.