The Official Writing Challenge
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What a beautiful poem!
It seemed like I was listening in to a private conversation.Thanks for sharing your thoughts.
Some of the metering was irregular, too short or too long, but the rhyming was great.
Keep writing.
Very personal and sweet.

It may be a bit long for this type of poetry--readers sometimes get caught up in the sing-songish rhythm. I like to advise poets to be brief, and if anything, to add more poetic elements: imagery, metaphor, simile for example. Check into a few of those, and see what you can do with your next poem.

I enjoyed "eavesdropping" on this prayer time.
Thank you for sharing this. Often I too wonder when I don't see results in those I pray for. Thanks for this reminder that God does hear and that our time in prayer is not wasted.
I really like the thought of approaching Father together with Jesus. Thank you for that.

I would suggest that you add more imagery to this poem, to make it even more encouraging. Let me know if you'd like some help or any tips...