The Official Writing Challenge
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Wow, powerful is the first word that comes to mind. You've presented a sermon in a concise, beautifully written entry. I'm quite moved.
This is very good. The poem is absolutely awesome.

Small point -- you start from Emma's POV, and then switch to the narrator's POV. Try to stick with one or the other in a short piece like this.

Very powerful message. Excellent job with the topic.
Wonderful message here. Good writing!
Still another piece for self-examination this week! Very powerful, and well-written. I agree with Sheri about the POV--one way to fix it in this piece would simply be to put the first paragraph in italics, so that it seems as if the narrator is imagining Emma's flight.
So sad! She didn't die did she?
I loved your vivid descriptions in the first paragraph.
I suggest a smoother transition into the poem.
Well done.
Congratulations, Annie, on placing seventh in your level. Great job!
Like it, especially 'when the smile doesn't reach the eyes' - nice technique.