The Official Writing Challenge
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That's good, Jason lived. ^-^ I like the happy ending. Now you should make a 3rd one called, "forbidden faith 3: the natzie's (how ever you spell it.) return!" jk ^-^
You grabbed my attention from the first sentence and held it all the way to the end. I'm glad Jason lived, by the way. :) This was really well done. Keep on writing!
Lots of suspense--good job on that.

I was a bit confused by the setting--Nazis were in the 1930s and 40s, but your narrator is wearing a tank top...are we in an alternate timeline of some sort?

Tweak this for clarity, and for a few mechanical errors, and it'll find an audience.

By the way, it's best not to enter continued stories to the Writing Challenge, as it defeats the "anonymous" aspect, especially if the judges remember your previous work.
Where was this contined from?
(last week, maybe?)
Be careful of the different forms of pronouns.
"Remember you injured" Use (you're).
I assume this is part of a larger story?
Keep writing.
Congratulations, Skittles, on placing 13th in your level. Great job!