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A moving account of persecution of sad!
Very touching! There are so many in the world who are being hunted and persecuted for the cause of Christ!
I liked this phrase "squeezing out traces of energy still left in his body that was already like a crushed lemon"
Change paragraphs when each new person speaks. It's easier to understand.
This was written as someone who has experienced this.
I could feel the intensity of the situation!
More spacing does help the reader.
Keep held my attention through the whole piece.
Very moving and stirring. What a beautiful reward awaits those who love Him and especially those murdered in His name.
It's good for Christians, especially in America, to remember that many are still violently persecuted for their faith. Your story makes me reflect on my own faith and ask, "What would I do?"

You may want to refresh yourself on comma usage. Tricky lil' buggers, but they can help some of the sentences flow more smootly (when used properly).