The Official Writing Challenge
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05/23/05
Beautiful
05/23/05
Very touching. Nice job.
Beautifully written from the excellent opening that makes you want to know why she had been isolated to the ending note. Two of my favorite phrases were "there had been just as many disappointments" and "a veteran of disappointment". I also thought effective the contrast of her life, someone else's death; her family's celebration,another family's sorrow.
Ok, tell me this: Why in the world did you consider yourself a "Beginner"? With your talent, you should be at least at the Intermediate Level. This story reach me at my core. Using a famous movie quote: "You had me at hello." Please save this story for your portfolio and USE it. This was one of the best stories I have read in a long time. Kudos to you. Thanks for sharing your gift with us at Faith Writers.
05/27/05
Wow. This is a moving story. It brought tears to my eyes. Very well written. Beautiful, beautiful.
05/27/05
I agree with Delores. Your writing is definitely NOT "beginner"