The Official Writing Challenge
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10/26/07
You have a good start with the idea of this piece.

I would have liked to have read more about the actual event. Perhaps more description and dialogue to capture the reader's attention.
I agree with the above comment... it would have been nice to read a little more about the actual event. It was well written however, and right on topic. Good job!