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What a wonderful description of the power of baptism. Keep writing!
You have great skill in your writing. The story was short but packed a lot of punch. It was descriptive, and I could imagine the scene as you described it. Good job!
You create beautiful word pictures.
Some formatting ( separating of paragraphs ) would make this visually easier to read.
Thank you for sharing and welcome aboard.

You have painted a beautiful picture in just a few words.
The awareness of the meaning of water baptism came too quickly. In the first sentence the MC is wondering what this act means at all. Three sentences later, the MC is totally submitting and obeying. A little sudden. You have a great writing style, build the reader's involvement a little longer to allow acceptance of such a dramatic character change.