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I am not a poet by any stretch of the imagination, but I really, really liked this. Very clever and creative. It kept my attention. I loved the repetition. Great job.

I think there should be a comman between the cities and states. (example: Dallas, Texas) Sorry if you already know this and did it like that for a reason.
09/24/07
Sorry it took me so long to get to this--your e-mail went to my work address and I didn't find it until this morning.

I love the content of this poem, and the parallel structure of the stanzas. There are some problems with forced rhyme and irregular meter--if I remember (feel free to e-mail me), I'll send you some tips on that this afternoon.
09/27/07
Neat thoughts as you've taken us to many major cities in the US. You finished off with a baby's birth...definitely a time to try to stay calm. Thanks! I enjoy reading poetry.