The Official Writing Challenge
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This is a very good pov. It would be a lot easier to read if it weren't all caps, but the message is still there.
08/23/07
Valuable words of warning--I hope this finds an audience.

In addition to the all-caps (which are difficult on the eyes, and may send people away), I'd recommend that you edit this a bit for flow--a more consistent meter will increase its poetic quality.

Thanks for submitting this poem!
My pastor calls it 'Easy Believism'. Your ending was as strong as your beginning. I do ditto the comments about all caps. Well done.
I really like this piece. These words might be good in a song form..
cowgirl