Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Sad (07/26/07)
-
TITLE: The Answer | Previous Challenge Entry
By Jean C Prentice
08/01/07 -
LEAVE COMMENT ON ARTICLE
SEND A PRIVATE COMMENT
ADD TO MY FAVORITES
I felt the tears as they flowed, in droplets down my cheek
A waste of time I said, my strength is just too weak
Another day of being sad about the loss of time
The doctor said you have a year, make use of all you have.
He does not know that these three words would not, could not
Become the healing balm of salve.
The sad I felt as I walked away, gave birth to other thoughts.
How sad my friends and family, could never know these words.
How sad that only I could keep this loss of leaving to myself
I have no friends I said that day, I have no family left.
I had left them far behind me, when I chose to walk away.
There tears and cries just angered me, they had to right to say
We love and want you, don’t you know? Please don’t run away
I am sad, because of things undone, sad because of things unsaid.
But do I have a right I ask, to call and make amends?
No! Because I chose this path and will walk it till it ends.
How sad that underneath the anger, was a soul that needed rest
How sad that now I knew I had been put to test.
O God I cried, as I walked away, let me make all things right
I heard His answer then as now, “My child walk to the light:
The opinions expressed by authors may not necessarily reflect the opinion of FaithWriters.com.
If you died today, are you absolutely certain that you would go to heaven? You can be right now. CLICK HERE
JOIN US at FaithWriters for Free. Grow as a Writer and Spread the Gospel.
PM me if you'd like a few suggestions for improving the meter of this piece, which shows great promise.
Love the last stanza in particular.
I am looking forward to future poems as your writing skills develop.
As is the case for all writers, rewrite and rewrite. Keep on striving- I believe you have much to share. As my friend reminds me, "Persevere, my Sister."