The Official Writing Challenge
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08/04/07
Did you mean to capitalize the whole essay? If felt the emotions expressed here but I was also off guard a little by the capitalization. I thought the concept was good a very true.
08/04/07
People will be more likely to stop and read this poem of witness if its format is more inviting--"all caps" is hard to read.

Be careful of spelling: I caught "deceit" and "divine".

Good job with encouraging your readers to find the One who will heal their sadness.
08/08/07
Good poem on the sad state of man. I agree with the comments - watch your spelling and formatting, but the message you brought out was a wonderful one. I too wonder how many tears God has shed over my disobedience.