The Official Writing Challenge
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A little confusing here. I think I missed something. I noticed the little thing with "Feet/page2" but I couldn't see anything for the 'first foot'. Otherwise, very interesting, the last few sentences are especially poignant.
Pretty good attempt, indeed it says the theme. Do a little editting, clean up some of the confusion. Keep writing.
You have lots of potential as a writer - some great phrasing and word choices. I agree, a little editing and this will shine! (I think "feet/page2" was left behind when copying from your word processor, correct? A minor snag.)
I've had embarrassing moments similar to this, too! A great story. It held my interest from beginning to end.