The Official Writing Challenge
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I remember feeling the same way about my siblings when they made mistakes. Your story mirrors the way most teens react to trouble!
Great opening. It was a bit confusing to me to read all the dialogue in italics. -- I think that's usually reserved for thoughts. Nice job.
A fresh teen story - an original idea making the MC NOT the one in trouble, and it being traumatic for her. I so enjoyed reading this! Some places, however, I didn't think the dialog sounded very "teen-ish", like "let's go have a chat with your parents" for example. And this sentence: "Im planning to go with Brad to the Chris Rice concert tomorrow night. Were supposed to be double-dating with you. Remember?" sounds a little forced. I'm thinking she surely remembers. :) But again, I loved your story. The emotions were well conveyed, and overall your writing was really good! :)