The Official Writing Challenge
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There was a little confusion as the way this story unfolded at times, but it was easy to figure out. It was a beautiful story of a man waiting patiently and having faith God had put this person in his life for a reason
This is a great story and I like the dialogue. However, the way you've written the story makes it hard to determine exactly what is happening and who is who and how they each relate one to the other. You are on to a nice heartwarming story. Keep writing!
A good story, just a little uncertainty. God does give second chances.
I agreed with the other suggestions on the flow of the piece. Someone had told this rookie that you need to double space between paragraphs when posting a story online. It's easier on the eyes.

I loved the story blurb and could see it in a book.
Ruth: What a dramatic setting you've built! This takes great imagination, which you obviously have! Good tension throughout!
Hi Ruth, you've created a great, very visual story. Reeece is an endearing and believable character. Second chances... ah!