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This story message has the principles of many a testimony - Thank you very much.
A little child shall lead them. Wonderful story.
Oh wow. I really like this. The ending is good as it leaves one wanting to know what changes and yet with hope that this is just the beginning for the boy's family. Great job. Janice
That's a good message, and I like how it was presented. Good job! :D
A main character that many children can relate to, and a great message.

There are some punctuation problems, and I think the messenger's longer speeches need to be broken down for your audience. Maybe a series of short questions and answers would work there.

Nice ending, with the open-ended hope.
This is a very, very nice story. One that gives hope too. It seems like the boy met an angel in his dream. Your story kept my interest clear through. Thanks!
This is very sweet story. It is filled with hope.
So full of hope! Thank you for sharing this special message. A little work on punctuation,and maybe the breaking up of the longer paragraphs into smaller ones, would make this even better. Wonderful job!
I, too, like the hope in your story and the message that Jesus changes lives for the better.
I love this story - a great teaching story!