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04/26/07
I enjoyed reading the dialogue between the 2 characters. I felt the beginning was too wordy in your description of the lady. Also, the ending sentence was a little awkward.
Very romantic. Good job. The writing is good too. You captured everything well.
04/26/07
Well told story. Very romantic spin.
04/29/07
Very lyrical...true to the genre.

Where I live, lilacs are at their peak in mid-May, and generally gone by June, and they grow in tall bushes, almost trees, not fields. That could be different elsewhere?

Nevertheless, your use of sensory words really contributed to the mood of this romantic piece.
04/30/07
Wow, what a lovely story. I loved his line when he gave her the roses; that would totally have melted my heart. Wonderful story!