The Official Writing Challenge
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Wow! What a twist in this story! An amazing turn of events. There were some grammar problems, and I think the ending was a bit abrupt, but with the word limit I think you did the best that you could. Nice job
A wow of a story.
Nice - I like surprise endings - though I think you could have fleshed it out a bit more, it seems hurried. Watch your verb tenses and typos - reading your entry out loud will help you see them better than reading it. A really good story, tho - keep writing!
Didn't see that end coming! Great story line. As already stated, there were some distractions, but they're all correctable. Keep the same story!!
Great story. It had me interested from beginning to end. You need to work on the basics a little because it takes away from the story a bit, but that will come with practice. Great job! Keep writing!