The Official Writing Challenge
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04/13/07
Wow! What a twist in this story! An amazing turn of events. There were some grammar problems, and I think the ending was a bit abrupt, but with the word limit I think you did the best that you could. Nice job
04/14/07
A wow of a story.
04/14/07
Nice - I like surprise endings - though I think you could have fleshed it out a bit more, it seems hurried. Watch your verb tenses and typos - reading your entry out loud will help you see them better than reading it. A really good story, tho - keep writing!
Didn't see that end coming! Great story line. As already stated, there were some distractions, but they're all correctable. Keep the same story!!
04/17/07
Great story. It had me interested from beginning to end. You need to work on the basics a little because it takes away from the story a bit, but that will come with practice. Great job! Keep writing!