The Official Writing Challenge
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04/12/07
A very nice little tale. With a little tweaking it would be a good beginning for a series. I can see Nosey sparking a series of tales. Keep writing!
Cute story. Very original. I could picture the two of you hiding in the grass and secretly listening. I could feel your admiration for Nosey. Good job.
I loved it! You did a great job of keeping my interest. I felt like I was there in the bushes with them!
04/13/07
Cute story, and Nosey was quite a character! When I was a kid, I had dreams of being a detective, too! It sounded so glamorous, exciting, and intellectually stimulating! :)

I would suggest that you space between sections of your story, though, for easier reading.

Good job!

04/18/07
My favorite line, beginning your summary paragraph:

"That was a golden summer."

You painted such a good picture of your characters, setting, and adventures that I certainly agree with that assessment. It sounds like a wonderful memory from childhood, where all the mysteries of life begin.

06/13/07
What a wonderful story and well written. I love stories I can picture and see in my mind. It's like watching a good movie.