The Official Writing Challenge
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02/16/07
Bravo! I enjoyed your story very much - it kept me interested until the end. Thank you! :)
02/16/07
Oh wow! This is very captivating, so well written, and so good! My attention never wavered, and I couldn't stop reading! Very well done!
02/18/07
Interesting, compelling reading.

There are are few punctuation problems, particularly when punctuating dialog.

You're a very descriptive writer--nice job.