The Official Writing Challenge
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I enjoyed this. I'm not quite sure why. I was a little confused as to the pov until the last verse (which I really liked). I think "to" should be "too" in your first line.
02/15/07
The third stanza of your poem is an excellent example of how temptation snares us. I like the twist on the subject 'craft' in this poem. I really like the rhythm.
02/16/07
A suggestion for improvement is to check your homonyms: words that sound alike yet are spelled differently. Here are two examples:

a) “The beauty of Lucinda, to wonderful for words” - the correct spelling is “too”

b) “knit one, pearl two” – the correct spelling is “purl”
02/18/07
You have some great images here. A few grammatical and word errors were a bit distracting, but I definitely enjoyed this!
02/21/07
Very interesting and rhythmical poem! I was a bit confused in places, as to what exactly was going on, but I understood it for the most part. Good message at the end!
02/22/07
I liked this as well, mostly for the descriptive images. I was also confused at times but overall I enjoyed it. Keep writing!