The Official Writing Challenge
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An interesting story and you definitely kept my attention through the entire tale. I'd love to see this expanded; nice characters and realistic dialog. Well done
You built your characters and dialog with much intrigue. I was caught up wanting to know what would happen next, but the ending kind of fizzled out.
Many times I write the ending first and build my story up from it.You have wonderful talent. Can't wait to see your next piece.
Nice story here; the dream had me curious and I like its fulfillment at the end. Needs a bit more showing instead of telling and some work on the ending, but otherwise a very good start!