The Official Writing Challenge
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12/07/06
The title of this drew me in--a personal name always sounds interesting (as well as the prospect of a female pastor!)

I could feel the nervousness of the narrator--great descriptions of this, especially the reference to her stomach turning upside down! The use of present tense was also very effective in conveying the tensionn of the present moment.

I noticed a slip into past tense in a couple of paragraphs. It would be good to keep the whole narrative in the same tense-and in this case, the present tense works beautifully!
12/07/06
And that's just how we should be - utterly out of our own competence and dependent on him. Thank you for wharing this well-related story.
12/10/06
I love this inside look at a pastor and her first sermon. I can see her nervousness and I love her reliance on the Lord. Nice work.