The Official Writing Challenge
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12/07/06
Great narrative--I could see and hear the cynical, hurting teenage narrator, picture him or her(?) carving words into the picnic bench (the opening drew me in at once!)and listening with doubt to the caring, prophetic pastor. Great title, too--that also drew me in!
12/10/06
What a compelling, well-told story! I love your title, your first paragraph, and the whole storyline. There were a few grammar issues, but nothing close edit wouldn't fix. Your descripion is quite good. Keep writing!
12/12/06
Very, very good. This was very well done and I could see it happening. Great job!
Wow. This was powerful writing here. A little more present tense would hold the reader a little tighter when reading. The story itself was great and I totally enjoyed reading it. Great job and great writing!