The Official Writing Challenge
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This is very nice. You expressed the feeling of true repentance well.

A few more paragraphs would have made it a bit easier to read, at least in my opinion.

God bless you. Keep up the good work.
I was drawn into your story and it held my attention. It was intriguing. Your ending reminded me of the saying, "Be careful of what you ask for!" He desired only sight... that sight allowing him to see his Savior's treacherous death. Good writing. Thanks for allowing us to see this story in a different way.
Wow! You really caught my attention
very well told. I always enjoy interpretations of Bible stories through other's eyes
This is really great. It was so real the way you presented this story and the end where you only asked for sight and not a blessing. Thanks for this lovely portrayal.
Wonderful I enjoyed every word.
You are a very good story teller.

You captured the heart of your character and how he must have felt.

I was captured by your character and the depth of his feeling. Nice writing. the part about the crucifiction is a good ending but could be led up to a bit more smoothly perhaps.