The Official Writing Challenge
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11/16/06
Vivid imagery and symbolism! I loved this story with its powerful message!

Favorite lines were, "I have rescued you from yourself and from sin," "Longing for what this man radiated filled her," and "You have opened your eyes a little bit to see, open them wider still and look at Me." I also appreciated the description of the stirring of her senses and the awakening of her heart.

Excellent writing! :)
11/17/06
Very nice flow - it holds the reader's attention all the way to the end. Excellent Message!
11/19/06
Lovely and soothing. I enjoyed the imagery here. A very good job.