The Official Writing Challenge
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09/18/06
I can completely relate to these ladies! You did a great job describing modern day life.

You need to polish this up and make a few grammatical corrections. Also, the theme is loosely tied in.

Overall, this is a great start. This would be a great short story as you take small peeks into the inner-workings of each lady and her family dynamics.

09/18/06
You tied together the vignettes, and the ending explained your theme very well! I can also relate to those ladies, and I enjoyed this very much
09/19/06
I really liked how you moved the story line from one woman to the next! Very nice comparison in the end, describing our relationship with God as a garden. I can definitely relate to this story!
Been there, done that. You wrote this convincingly. I would have liked to have seen the garden theme woven in a little sooner, but this is just a suggestion. Great job, and a good read!
09/19/06
I really enjoyed this and it spoke to an area of my life I dealt with just today-the busyness of my life verses time with Him.

Like the other comment, I enjoyed the peaks into other lives. Somehow we tend not to think of the individual sequence of events in the lives of those around us, especially when we need them to do something. May we be more aware of our time with Him and value the time of others as well. Great job!!!!