The Official Writing Challenge
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Nice story from a child's perspective! I enjoyed this. The first paragraph seemed a bit out of place, but otherwise this was lovely. You did a fine job of getting into the head of this little girl!
What a lovely, well written story! I am going to read it to my 8 year old son as I think it will speak to his heart.
This a a very touching story about how Jesus can be real to a child. The first and last paragraph seemed to detract from the real meat of this read. I would suggest eliminating them and then drawing a strong conclusion with Jackie standing at the cross in the cemetery.