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This is well done. It would make a wonderful little devotion on Spiritual Warfare. I like how you have used your son's experience in the military to display how a Christian needs to fight in the Lord's army. Very neat!
I also think this would be a wonderful devotional, especially now when we are all so focused on our soldiers and the war on terror. I also like the night vision connection, comparing it with Satan and Jesus. You have some wonderful analogies.

You have a nice writing style that is easy to read and comprehend.

If you do decide to try to publish this as a devotional, my only suggestions would be to correct some minor grammatical errors and tighted this up a bit.

Other than that, this is great.

Good job.
This is good, but try finding another word for sneaky. While it may be appropriate, it is rather juvenile for this piece.
If I had to guess (which I know I don't), I would say that you were thinking something like "Let your light so shinme before men, that they may see your good works and glorify your Father in heaven." as spoken by Jesus (recorded in Matthew's gospel 5:16). The notion that we can live during the day without night-goggles is what gave me that idea. As others have said, it is a wonderful devotional (that said, if you wanted to make it personal it wouldn't be hard, you could just say something from your father's perspective about your son going to war).
Sorry, about the typo in "shine" above. Note that when I said "your father's perspective" I meant your perspective as a father, not our Father's perspective (you could, but that is the hardest perspective to write from).