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TITLE: Adventure In The Rain Barrel (Part 1) 10/2/15
By Rachel Jamerson
10/02/15
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This is a story about puppets that come to life after the puppeteers leave them in the storage room.

The piece was too long for one article - Therefore entered as two separate pieces Part 1 and Part 2
It was a beautiful spring day. The sunlight spilling through the trees created dancing patterns on the playroom floor. A small red breasted Robin perched on the windowsill sang beautifully while warming herself in the rays of the sun.
The puppets had just returned from their regular Saturday morning practice session. The story they were to do for Sunday school this week was about David and Goliath. Bud and Tatter were having a great time playing with their props. Bud with his shoestring sling and Tatter in his tin can armor, both busily scurrying about the room.
Bud slipped a pebble into his sling and began twirling it around his head. Tatter, waving his sword in the air yelled, "they send a child to fight the mighty Goliath!”
Daisy and Hattie Lou were stretched out on an overstuffed Panda Bear in the corner reading their latest adventure story. Suddenly one of the shoestrings slipped through Bud's fingers and "zip" the stone went flying through the air barely missing Hattie Lou’s head!
"Yipe" yelled Hattie Lou. “What was that?"
“I’m sorry", said Bud, as he rushed to retrieve his ammunition, “it slipped!”
"Slipped" yelled Daisy, "Bud Calico you could have really hurt Hattie Lou, put those props back in the trunk!"
Bud shoved the smooth stone into his pocket. "But Tatter and I want to practice for the show tomorrow. I know, we’ll go outside and practice” he said then scrambled up on the windowsill.
"Oh no you don't," answered Daisy. "It’s dangerous out there. What if the neighbor’s dog got loose again? There wouldn't be anything left of you."
"But Daisy, we would be careful it's such a nice day."
"Not today Bud,” replied Daisy, "Maybe another time when we are sure Duke is safely shut up in the lot."
Bud and Tatter sat by the window pretending they were in the valley of Elah watching the battle between the Israelite s and the Philistine Soldiers. Daisy and Hattie Lou went back to their book and for a while all was quiet.
Suddenly from around the corner of the house came Blue the cat from next door with Spot Ms J's Beagle close behind. Boy was she is moving! Spot was just about to close down on her bushy tail when she made it to the big Oak tree beside the garage. Up she went like a flash leaving Spot wondering what happened.
Bud gazed at Spot for a moment, growling and sniffing around the base of the old tree. Then he turned to Tatter and whispered, "sure looks like Goliath to me." Before Tatter could say a word Bud shoved up the sash, swung himself over the windowsill and dropped to the ground outside.
Tatter started to yell but had second thoughts. Daisy had not seen Bud slip through the open window and he didn't want to get him in trouble. But then too Bud might need his help. Tatter carefully crawled through the opening and tumbled to the ground alongside an old crate someone had left under the window.
Bud was already crouched behind the hedge that ran along the edge of the yard. He was waiting for Spot to tire of looking for Blue and come back his way. (Continued in part 2)
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