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This is a nice story. It sounds like you wrote it for this week's challenge with the topic being cup. If I were to go over the judges criteria for each of the categories, these are my thoughts about how well you met that particular criterion.
The first one is how well do this fit the topic? Now if the topic was indeed cup, then you certainly had that criterion covered. I also thought it was quite creative. It made me feel like I was watching an old commercial about the best thing the world has ever been offered. The third criterion is how well-crafted is this piece. On that one, your story could use a bit of polishing. No big deal but more little things like: The first sentence is quite long and I'd suggest cutting it down into at least three shorter ones so as to not overwhelm the reader. Also a few commas and hyphens would help with the flow. I've added some in this sentence to show you what I mean: This is an all-purpose, most-powerful detergent today. The nest two criteria are a good beginning and a satisfying end. You did make me smile with your beginning as it took me back many years to a simpler time. The ending brought the story full-circle which is always a good thing. Though it still needs a bit of polishing, I thought it a fresh idea with a wonderful message. Keep writing those words that Jesus puts on your heart. :)
Very creative piece! And so true. Thanks for sharing!