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Posted: Thu Oct 15, 2009 11:32 pm
by glorybee
GShuler wrote:I know these shouldn't rhyme but is internal rhyming taboo as well?
I see you flying
in defiance of science.
Stay free, Bumblebee.
This one is just for fun:
Don't count your chickens
while they are still in the egg...
they may be guineas.
Gerald, sorry it took so long to respond to this. I'm on vacation...having a great time
Both of your haiku are delightful!
Posted: Fri Oct 16, 2009 5:15 am
by colin_nielsen
I've never done one of these before, so I probably will not do as well as others. Ten point for anyone who can guess what it means.
Oh Precious Daughter
evil wind took you away
from me forever.
Posted: Sat Oct 17, 2009 10:08 pm
by glorybee
colin_nielsen wrote:I've never done one of these before, so I probably will not do as well as others. Ten point for anyone who can guess what it means.
Oh Precious Daughter
evil wind took you away
from me forever.
Colin, how beautiful and sad!
Posted: Sun Oct 18, 2009 2:24 am
by colin_nielsen
lol the metaphor wasn't as clear as my other one. Tough to do with such a low word count.
It was supposed to be written from the POV of a Japanese man who has lost his daughter in the atomic blasts that ended world war two.
Posted: Sun Oct 18, 2009 1:08 pm
by CatLin
colin_nielsen wrote:lol the metaphor wasn't as clear as my other one. Tough to do with such a low word count.
It was supposed to be written from the POV of a Japanese man who has lost his daughter in the atomic blasts that ended world war two.
Oh, how beautiful! I puzzled over it for a while last night. This answer was one I didn't consider. You could title it, to "reveal" the symbolism somewhat.
Posted: Fri Oct 23, 2009 11:50 am
by Kid Denver
My sole has a hole
Dry feet once safe war with wet
Heaven weeps warm mist
Henry C.
Posted: Fri Oct 23, 2009 5:18 pm
by Kid Denver
Sunset streams run dry
Chai tea steams from mug with scent
Cursor blinks blinks blinks
Henry C.
Posted: Sat Oct 24, 2009 11:19 am
by glorybee
Henry, those are wonderful--I've got to admit that I'd substitute coffee for chai tea in that last one, but I appreciate the mood!
Posted: Sat Oct 24, 2009 12:19 pm
by pheeweed
Hey Jan,
I just wanted to tell you that the poem I wrote for the challenge - Almanac
http://www.faithwriters.com/wc-article- ... p?id=31959 - was inspired by this class. I would never have thought of it otherwise. And I was so disappointed that one of my lines was missing a syllable. I counted it so many times, but revised it at the last minute. Oh well. It was just a reminder that I'm not there yet and have to keep working on my skills.
Phee
Posted: Sat Oct 24, 2009 12:42 pm
by glorybee
Phee! I wondered whose that was! Marvelous!
Posted: Sun Oct 25, 2009 10:12 pm
by Kid Denver
glorybee wrote:Henry, those are wonderful--I've got to admit that I'd substitute coffee for chai tea in that last one, but I appreciate the mood!
But, I don't like the word coffee
It's confusing; both hard and soft sounding, and reminds me of a person who gets coughed on. "Jan spread the germs. She didn't cover her mouth. She was the cougher. Poor Henry, an innocent bystander, was the receipient of the uncovered spray of germs. Henry was the coughee and unhappy. He ordered a cup of hot chai tea to chill. He was told they only had iced chai tea. He told them to put it in the microwave and humor him because he was a coughee in recovery."
But, other than that, thanks for the compliment.
Posted: Sun Oct 25, 2009 10:14 pm
by Kid Denver
I don't like coffee
I prefer a cup of tea
Unless there's Pepsi
Henry C.
Posted: Sun Oct 25, 2009 10:18 pm
by glorybee
The waitress asks me
"Pepsi okay? No Coke here."
My saddened heart weeps.
Posted: Mon Oct 26, 2009 7:05 am
by pheeweed
I ask for water
Pepsi or Coke, matters not
If not caffeine free
haiku try
Posted: Sun Nov 22, 2009 11:58 am
by lidijo1
so many mentions
of soft drink preferences
making me thirsty
Lisa J.