Be a Better Writer--Commas with conjunctions

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...And I still have to look up all the different tenses of 'lie' and 'lay.' Every. Single. Time. I've been known to re-write a sentence in order to avoid having to use any of those words.
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RachelM wrote:I was recently told about a rhetorical device called asyndeton where conjunctions are intentionally left out.
I find asyndeton and its opposite, polysyndeton, amazingly powerful. I used to teach these techniques to my legal writing students, but without using the technical terms. Here's an example:

Normal: Larry returned home after going everywhere his mother had asked him to go--the grocery store, the craft shop, the deli, and the shoe store.

Asyndeton: Larry returned home after going everywhere his mother had asked him to go--the grocery store, the craft shop, the deli, the shoe store.

Polysyndeton: Larry returned home after going everywhere his mother had asked him to go--the grocery store and the craft shop and the deli and the shoe store.

Which trip sounds quick and easy and which sounds arduous? Or which Larry sounds glad to help his mother and which sounds put upon?
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Larry is a good son!

I've used both of those techniques, too, without knowing that they were things with actual names. Just one more example of the power of a single little word.
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Hi Jan,

Even though I was unable to open this lesson from your complied lists, going through the list of actual lessons enabled me to open it. I'm glad my tenacity wasn't letting up because I learned a great acronym FANBOYS. What a great tool. Thank you!

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Jan, curious as to the correct comma placement.

I ask the questions, and you answer them.

i ask the questions and you answer them.

Which is right?
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JudySauer wrote:Jan, curious as to the correct comma placement.

I ask the questions, and you answer them.

i ask the questions and you answer them.

Which is right?
Judy, you've tapped into a gray area. Generally, you use a comma before 'and' if 'and' is joining two independent clauses (as it is here).

However, if the clauses are short (as they are here), then you can omit the comma.

In this case, go with whichever one seems best to you.
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One of my early teachers taught us to remember that the apostrophe marked where a word was squeezed until a letter squirted out.
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As always, thanks Jan for your infinite wisdom. I wrote it without a comma, then later questioned myself. Your answer helps me grasp the comma usage in this scenario.

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